Mercy (mercscilla) wrote,
Mercy
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Mmhh

I'm still sick and now I've got a big problem. Someone told me I have a serious 'tense-jumping' in my stories. I can't ask them what they really mean, so I will ask you.

Stories are written in the past tense but when someone talks or thinks you use the simple present. Like this:
He walked down the stairs. "You know, you look like a king in his best years." She said. Or is that more than wrong???

And the second thing is:
He read the report while eating a cookie. OR He read the report while he was eating a cookie. What's right???

If anyone could help me I would be in your debt forever ^-^

Oh and got some song ideas for a vid? Tell me!
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